The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen

and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the age proportion of Yemen and Italy between 2000 and prediction for 2050.
Overall
, teenager to mature group becomes the largest proportion in the two
contries
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countries
shown. The second widest age group in Yemen is children citizens
while
for Italy, it is dominated by elderly
people
. Looking at the information in more detail, Yemen will have slightly more than
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half citizens by 2050.
In contrast
, the population of children will decrease from 50.1% in 2000 to 37.0% in 2050. For elderly
people
, the projections show that there will increase around 2% from only 3.6% in 2000 to around 5.7% in 50 years later.
On the other hand
,
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majority of
population
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in Italy will be fulfilled by
people
in
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group 15 to 59 years in 2050.
While
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people
with children ages in 2000 were slightly lower than a quarter and it will
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to only about 10%. For
people
with 60+ years, there will dramatically increase by around 20% in 2050
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