many parts of the world people are relying more and more on prepared food from grocery stores and restaurants because they are too busy to cook at home .this is bad because home cooked food is much better for us to what extend do you agree or disagree ?
Some
people
tend to prefer processed food
from stores and restaurants rather than natural-ingredient food
. I strongly agree that this
is a bad idea due to
how prepared foods are unhealthy and can be addicting, especially for children.
When consuming processed food
, some health
risks can be gained due to
some of these reasons. First,
the high level of sugar in processed food
would be one of the main reasons why it should not be overconsumed by people
. Some of them also
have an amount of additional fat. These types of foods can cause several health
problems, including obesity, heart disease, and many other complications. On top of that, instant foods consist of low nutrition, which can lead to a slower growing process in children. So, although
the price of processed food
is cheaper than natural-ingredient food
, overconsuming it will be unhealthy and cause many health
diseases.
The consumption behaviour of processed food
can also
lead to addiction which can be bad in the long run. This
action is caused by the flavours provided by processed food
. Children tend to choose instant food
over home-cooked food
, as it has an enhanced taste. Due to
that, some people
prefer to consume processed food
each day as it fits better in their taste buds. These lead to more consumers stocking instant food
for their daily meals. However
, all those flavours came
from artificial ingredients; Wrong verb form
come
in other words
, it is also
unhealthy for overconsumption.
In conclusion, home-cooked food
is better to consume rather than processed food
, as it can cause complications of health
risks as well as
slow down the regeneration process of underage kids. As it is an important aspect of life, I hope more people
will be aware of this
problem in the future.Submitted by hnnfh
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task achievement
Try to include specific examples or studies to strengthen your argument about the health risks of processed food and its addictive nature.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down some of the long sentences to improve readability and enhance understanding.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively encapsulate the main argument, providing a strong opening and closing for the essay.
task achievement
The points about processed food's health risks and addictive nature are relevant and clearly presented.