Some people think that social media websites are a great way to create networks whereas others think that personal meetings are the best means to have a social network. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Increasing
popularity of social Add an article
The increasing
media
has sparked a debate about whether it is the best way to meet others
or face-to-face
meetings are still more effective than social Correct word choice
whether face-to-face
media
platforms
. This
essay will examine both edges of the discussion and present my stance on it.
Proponents of the online platforms
often cite several reasons. Firstly
, it is easier to reach other people
by using them. Each social media
user has their own profile
which is often reachable by that profile
's name so everyone who has a specific profile
name can access some important information about that specific user, such
as profile
photograph and publicly available personal information given at the biography section, and it is possible to send a friend request to that person. Therefore
it's possible for a social media
user to expand his or her network by knowing only another person's profile
name. Secondly
, online websites allow people
to communicate with their friends who live far away, thus
keeping their relation
strong. Snapchat, Replace the word
relationship
for instance
, help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
people
to send daily photographs and videos to make
their friends updated about developments in their lives even Verb problem
keep
who
live in Correct pronoun usage
those who
another country
.
Fix the agreement mistake
other countries
On the other hand
, supporters of personal meetings argue that the vitual
networks created by Correct your spelling
virtual
such
platforms
are not real. People
can have more intact, strong, and close relations with others
if they lean on to meet them as person
Add an article
a person
instead
of spending their time on social media
creating artificial and distant relations. In addition
, they believe that meeting with new people
and speding
time with friends in the real world, as they say, help individuals to improve their social skills. If one Correct your spelling
spending
start
spending most of his or her time on social Change the verb form
starts
media
instead
of real world
interactions, their ability to socialize with Add a hyphen
real-world
others
will diminish. The exprience
we had during the Covid-19 pandemic is Correct your spelling
experience
the
prime example since Correct article usage
a
people
couldn't go out and socialize, corrupting their skills and leading to social anxiety among many people
.
In conclusion, many believe that using social media
platforms
is the most important way to creating
and Wrong verb form
create
expanding
networks, Wrong verb form
expand
while
others
argue that real interactions between individuals are still more significant than those websites as they may cause artificial relationships and decaying social skills. I firmly believe that latter
opinion is more valid.Correct article usage
the latter
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