Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere, this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a major trend to eat junk foods around the globe
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are running around the entire world giving
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proccesed
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agree with the notion that fast
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effect on
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living style and health. To commence
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, dehydrated
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lives easier everyone likes to eat it and it has
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their habit.To explore it, people who are busy in their lives prefer to eat junk
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because they have no time to cook
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The essay addresses the general topic of the prevalence of fast food.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • nutritional deficiency
  • malnutrition
  • convenience
  • nutritional value
  • busy lifestyles
  • balanced meals
  • economic impact
  • lower-income groups
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural heritage
  • culinary diversity
  • mass production
  • environmental degradation
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