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Graph Below Shows the Annual Visitor Spend for Visitors to New Zealand from 5 Countries for the Years 1996 to 2014

Graph Below Shows the Annual Visitor Spend for Visitors to New Zealand from 5 Countries for the Years 1996 to 2014
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The illustrated line graph below depicts the spending amount of money
to
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by
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 New Zealand visitors from five different countries in the
period
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of
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apply
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1996 and 2014. Generally, the noticeably high result is shown by the visitors from Australia with the highest index of about 2500 New Zealand
dollars
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 in 2006. In 1996
China
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 was the least spending Country with approximately 0
dollars
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,
while
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UK
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the UK
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 demonstrated considerably higher
result
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results
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 with about five hundred
dollars
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. Despite
this
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 in the
period
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 of 1996 and 2004 the indexes of
China
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 rose gradually,
whereas
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 UK’s fell down, so in 2004
difference
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the difference
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 between them was only
hundred
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a hundred
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dollars
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 in
favor
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 of
China
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. In the
period
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 of 2010 and
2014
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2014,
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 the marks of
USA
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the USA
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 rapidly declined from 1500
dollars
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 to only
thousand
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a thousand
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dollars
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, in comparison with
China
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,
who
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which
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 was
only
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the only
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 country, which raised its indexes in
this
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period
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 from two hundred to three hundred
dollars
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. The
period
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 between 1996 and 2006 saw
a
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apply
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sharp growth and in 2006
the
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Australians
spend
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spent
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 2.5 times as much money as they did in 1996.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, dollars, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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