The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
Given above are the charts depicting the cause of adults
decided
Wrong verb form
deciding
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to study and the stakeholders who should be responsible for the
cost
of studying. The
studying
Correct word choice
apply
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reasons being investigated were their interest in the subjects, earning qualifications, getting help with their current jobs, improving prospects of promotion, enjoying learning, gaining access to switch jobs and meeting new
people
.
Also
, the learners thought that the
cost
of studying should be shared by three main stakeholders which were the taxpayers, the learners themselves and their employers.
According to
the bar chart, the figures indicated that the main reasons for learning among adults were their primary interest in the subjects and gaining qualifications
while
less than 10
people
revealed that they studied in order to meet
people
.
Furthermore
,
according to
the pie chart, most
people
agreed that the
cost
of study should be shared primarily by individuals and employers with a percentage of 40% and 35% respectively. To summarize, most adults studied because they enjoyed the subjects and
hoping
Wrong verb form
hoped
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to gain corresponding qualifications
while
only a few
people
tried to gain higher
qualification
Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
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to facilitate
jobs
Fix the agreement mistake
job
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switching and to meet
people
. In the meanwhile, most
people
thought the
cost
of their courses should be covered by themselves and their employers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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