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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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Given above are the charts depicting the cause of adults
decided
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deciding
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 to study and the stakeholders who should be responsible for the
cost
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 of studying. The
studying
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apply
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reasons being investigated were their interest in the subjects, earning qualifications, getting help with their current jobs, improving prospects of promotion, enjoying learning, gaining access to switch jobs and meeting new
people
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.
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, the learners thought that the
cost
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 of studying should be shared by three main stakeholders which were the taxpayers, the learners themselves and their employers.
According to
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 the bar chart, the figures indicated that the main reasons for learning among adults were their primary interest in the subjects and gaining qualifications
while
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 less than 10
people
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 revealed that they studied in order to meet
people
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.
Furthermore
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,
according to
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 the pie chart, most
people
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 agreed that the
cost
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 of study should be shared primarily by individuals and employers with a percentage of 40% and 35% respectively. To summarize, most adults studied because they enjoyed the subjects and
hoping
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hoped
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 to gain corresponding qualifications
while
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 only a few
people
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 tried to gain higher
qualification
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qualifications
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 to facilitate
jobs
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job
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 switching and to meet
people
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. In the meanwhile, most
people
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 thought the
cost
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 of their courses should be covered by themselves and their employers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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