The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram depicts the floor design of a library today and two decades ago with specific details.
Overall
, we can observe that there have been number
of changes and relocations over the period of 20 years. Mainly in the central part of the floor where there are no longer tables and chairs. We can Change the article
a number
the number
also
notice that the only thing which stayed the same is
the location of the entrance door.
Wrong verb form
was
Firstly
, the section of children’s books
which was in the right-hand corner of the north, is replaced by the lecture room. You now are able to find children’s fiction books
in front of the place that they used to be in the left-hand corner which is developed more by adding a couple of sofas. Also
, storytelling events are held there too. This
was the former place for CDs and computer games, which no longer exist. Although
now there is a computer room next to the entrance to the left which in the past was considered as a reading space.
Secondly
, now there are adult fiction books
in the former position of non-fiction books
. Right after that, you can find the information desk. Also
now there are some self-service machines available just near the café which was the place for enquiry desk before.Submitted by mahtaesmailian on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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