The Number of People working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend?

After the
covid–19
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COVID–19
virus
spreading
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all over the world, working from
home
has spread all over the world and
this
trend is growing
popularity
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in popularity
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in some nations.
This
essay will illustrate the merits and demerits of
this
new working style. On the one hand, working from
home
has several drawbacks.
Firstly
, Employees face many mental health issues when they
work
from
home
.
Such
as depression and anxiety are
made
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by
lack
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a lack
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of
face to face
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interaction
make
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makes
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low
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the low
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level of knowledge transmission between colleagues.
This
lead
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leads
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to miscommunication and
decrease
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decreases
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the
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apply
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work
effectiveness. So
due to
this
reason,
particular
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the particular
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company gets low productivity.
Secondly
, People who
working through
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work
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online,
they
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spend their valuable
time
in front of
computer
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a computer
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long
time
, so
this
lead to
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their physical health
also
,
for example
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of Non
communicable
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non-communicable
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diseases suddenly increases worldwide after
the
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apply
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Covid-19
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COVID-19
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, Diseases are obesity,
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and heart-attack
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heart-attack
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heart
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. With that
this
prevents the
team
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teamwork
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work
physically. So Some targets cannot be reached by the organization.
On the other hand
,
this
trend has more benefits.
First
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advantage of
this
system
we
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is we
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may reduce
the
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traffic congestion and transport
cost
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costs
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; most
of
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apply
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the
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people spend more
time
for
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apply
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traveling
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travelling
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to reach their
working station
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workstation
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and spend
such
amount
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an amount
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of money
to
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on
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their travelling. But
Due to
these changes, they
work
without stress and save
the
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salary through
this
system. Another advantage is spending with family members more
time
.
This
lead
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leads
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to
increase
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the family bonds and
get
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family support when they feel bad.
To conclude
, Working from
home
has
the
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certain disadvantages, but they can
engulf
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overcome
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this
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these
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issues
proper
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with proper
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handling methods. Through
this
method
work
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working
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from
home
will be
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a successes
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successes
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success
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to
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for to
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employees get
time
and cost savings.
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