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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts demonstrate the population ages of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and the prediction for 2050. 
Overall
, Almost the majority of the
populations
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population
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 in both countries
are
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is
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 between 15 to 59
years
 old in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2000 and
in
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apply
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2050. In Yemen, it was illustrated that half of the population
were
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was
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 in the range of 0 to 14
years
 old, but in 2050, it's expected to decline to 37%.
On the other hand
, the group of 15 to 59
years
 old are projected to incline from 46.3% to 57.3%. For people who are 60
years
 old and above, it is claimed to elevate
also
 from 3.6% to 5.7%. For Italy, Most of the population in 2000
were
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was
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in
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between
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 the ages of 15 to 59
years
 old and
it
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this
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 is expected to
be decrease
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decrease
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 from 61.6% to 46.2%. For the ages of 0 to 14
years
 old, it is expected to decline
about
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 2.8%.
However
, the only group
that is
 estimated to
be increased
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increase
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 is the age group of 60
years
 old and above, it is expected to increase from 24.1% to 42.3%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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