The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to

the college site in the future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustrate
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a college building now and the future changes of its site.
Overall
, the most obvious change is removing the footpath and the garden, which gave the
area
an
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extra space to expand and add more facilities and utilities. In the present, there is a footpath that
connect
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the Car Park, the classes, and the garden together. The
enterance
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entrance
of the building is located in front of the
gareden
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garden
and the toilet is on the other side of it. The number of classes is less than in the future plan. In 2020, the footpath and the garden are expected to be removed. The
area
will
then
be larger giving it more space to make more classrooms and
parkings
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parking
. The
enterance
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entrance
is
allocted
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located
allocated
anterior to the Bus Stop. The reception will change from having
it's
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own chamber to a desk in between the classes. The toilet is removed to the opposite side.
Additionally
, A new
area
will open which is the shop, which was previously the lunch
area
.
Lastly
, the lunch
area
will be beside the shop.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • architecture
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • facade
  • landscaping
  • expansion
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • pedestrian
  • vehicular traffic
  • demolition
  • construction
  • recreational areas
  • commons
  • atrium
  • courtyard
  • upgrade
  • sustainability
  • commute
  • ingress
  • egress
  • blueprint
  • survey
  • layout
  • zoning
  • modernization
  • conservation
  • integration
  • footprint
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