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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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The
chart
 below shows the results of a survey about people’s
coffee
 and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian
cities
 The given bar
chart
 elaborates
coffee
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on coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in Australia.
Overall
, consumption of hot drinks in five
cities
like
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apply
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Sydney
,
Melbourne
, Brisbane, Adelaide and
Hobart
 are presented with
percentage
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percentages
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. The
chart
 gives a great
change
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chance
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 of analyzing the usage of fresh and
instant
coffee
 by the consumers in
last
 4 weeks,
coupled with
 the visiting cafes for
coffee
 and tea.
Sydney
,
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
 can be categorized as
cities
 which prefer going to a café, being responsible for approximately two-thirds. Brisbane and Adelaide come after
Sydney
,
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
,
account
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accounting
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 for nearly half. The amount of drinking
instant
coffee
 differs from fresh one
due to
cities
. It is obvious from the
chart
 that the citizens of
Hobart
 are really
coffee
 lovers, it is nearly more than half. The range of buying
instant
coffee
of
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in
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 the other
cities
 fluctuates between approximately 52 and 45 percent. Compared with
the
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apply
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buying
instant
coffee
,
fresh
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a fresh
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 one is
less
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a less
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 preferred option in 3
cities
 including Brisbane, Adelaide and
Hobart
, with nearly two-fifths
percent
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per cent
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.
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
 can be regarded as the
cities
 which
preferring
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prefer
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instant
 and fresh
coffee
 in the same equality,
account
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accounting
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 for more than
two fifths
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two-fifths
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.
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