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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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The
chart
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 below shows the results of a survey about people’s
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian
cities
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 The given bar
chart
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 elaborates
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coffee
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on coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in Australia.
Overall
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, consumption of hot drinks in five
cities
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like
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apply
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Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane, Adelaide and
Hobart
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 are presented with
percentage
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percentages
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. The
chart
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 gives a great
change
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chance
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 of analyzing the usage of fresh and
instant
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coffee
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 by the consumers in
last
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 4 weeks,
coupled with
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 the visiting cafes for
coffee
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 and tea.
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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 can be categorized as
cities
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 which prefer going to a café, being responsible for approximately two-thirds. Brisbane and Adelaide come after
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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,
account
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accounting
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 for nearly half. The amount of drinking
instant
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coffee
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 differs from fresh one
due to
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cities
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. It is obvious from the
chart
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 that the citizens of
Hobart
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 are really
coffee
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 lovers, it is nearly more than half. The range of buying
instant
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coffee
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of
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in
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 the other
cities
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 fluctuates between approximately 52 and 45 percent. Compared with
the
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apply
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buying
instant
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coffee
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,
fresh
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a fresh
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 one is
less
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a less
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 preferred option in 3
cities
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 including Brisbane, Adelaide and
Hobart
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, with nearly two-fifths
percent
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per cent
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.
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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 can be regarded as the
cities
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 which
preferring
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prefer
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instant
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 and fresh
coffee
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 in the same equality,
account
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accounting
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 for more than
two fifths
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two-fifths
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.
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