The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of voluntary supporters in the different organizations in 2008 and 2014. Looking at the charts,
it is clear that
the percentages of environmental,
sport
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and health care
volunteers
in organizations witnessed
the
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growth
while
these figures for other genres recorded
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decrease. It is noticeable that education and
environment
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activities attracted the largest numbers of
volunteers
in 2008 and 2014. In 2008, 24% of
volunteers
participated in environmental organizations.
However
,
this
number fell
down
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dramatically by 7% after 6 years.
While
the educational organization continuously grew up to 29% in the given period.
Additionally
, we can see that the rate of
volunteers
in
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fields shot up considerably from 15% in 2008 to 25% in 2014. Starting at 18% and 15% respectively in 2008, the figure for art and other voluntary work recorded a similar decline of 6% over a 6-year period. Healthcare stayed almost unchanged over the years, with only a 1% increase. Experiencing 6 years,
this
field still
unimproved
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the
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attraction to
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supporters.
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