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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The following chart illustrates the preference of people for
coffee
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 and tea in five different cities
of
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 Australia. It is possible to state that a large proportion of people decide to go to café for tea and
coffee
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 in four metropoles
such
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 as
Sydney
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, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart except Adelaide.
It is clear that
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 in
Sydney
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, Melbourne and Hobart residents importantly prefer to go to café for tea and
coffee
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 above 60% only in Adelaide it is rated with second place just below
the
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50%. Buying fresh
coffee
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 is not popular among the population
with
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in
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 all the towns
hence
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 the highest indication is 44% in
Sydney
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 and the lowest is in Brisbane just below 35 %. Purchasing instant
coffee
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 is
maintain
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maintained
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second
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a second
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 place among the hobbies of citizens of five urban
area
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areas
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. It is substantially popular in Hobart with
the
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a
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 proportion
54
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of 54
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 in
while
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 in
Sydney
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 it is the least welcomed by people with 46 %.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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