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Computers are widely used in education and teachers now play a less important role in the classroom than ever before. Do you agree or disagree?

#computers #education #teachers #role #classroom
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Sometimes a group of
people
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 see the words on the passages in different colors,
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 as the numbers seen
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 or some words seen
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According to
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 neuroscientists, these
people
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 have a
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 called
synesthesia
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.
This
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 Greek word means together and
come
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 from perception’s
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allowing for a combination of different sensory perceptions. Neurologist Richard Cytowic learned about
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 from his
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 who tasted shapes and a colleague who saw the sound of his hospital pager as red lightning bolts. He and other scientists believe
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 is not abnormal, and that we all may experience it at birth.
People
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 with
synesthesia
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 retain indistinct sensory boundaries throughout their lives. The relationships between different sensory perceptions in synesthetes are consistent over time, and the sensations are unique to each individual.
While
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 anyone can create links between senses and other ideas through metaphor, synesthetes experience these relationships spontaneously without conscious thought. Synesthetic experiences,
although
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 often used as a means to enhance memory or a source of inspiration, can
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 lead to negative reactions.
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, a synesthete may feel physically sick when exposed to certain sensory stimuli,
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 as the sound of paper.
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, researchers like Professor Simon
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 believe it is more useful to think of
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 as
enriched
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 perception rather than a negative
condition
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. Famous individuals like the artist Wassily Kandinsky are believed to have had
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, and their
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 is thought to have influenced their work. Medical science has known about
synesthesia
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 for centuries, but there is currently a renewed interest in understanding the
condition
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. It is known to be more frequent among women and left-handed individuals and appears to run in families.
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, estimates of the number of
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 with
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 vary widely, from 1 in 200 to 1 in 2,000, and many
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 with
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 may not even realize that their
condition
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 has a name.
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coherence
Work on improving the logical flow of the essay. Use more transition words to ensure the ideas connect smoothly.
coherence
Provide a clearer, more focused introduction and possibly a conclusion to round off the essay effectively.
task achievement
Ensure all main points are well-supported with relevant examples or further explanations.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a broad understanding of the subject matter and includes relevant examples such as references to Wassily Kandinsky and Professor Simon Baron Cohen's views.
clear comprehensive ideas
Most ideas presented are clear and comprehensive, showing a good grasp of synesthesia's features and implications.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital resources
  • personalized guidance
  • interactive learning
  • e-learning platforms
  • adaptive learning technologies
  • individualized learning
  • emotional support
  • motivation
  • social development
  • teamwork
  • emotional intelligence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • discussion
  • debate
  • real-time feedback
  • technological limitations
  • digital divide
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