The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and 

amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 

1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
The upper
graph
indicates rates of
households
which have washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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respectively. The lower
graph
shows the trend which is
amount
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the amount
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of hours for housekeeping in a week. Each figure
show
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the result which is investigated from 1920 to 2019. On the upper
graph
, in1920, washing machine is
at
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in
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the first position, which is used by 40
percentage
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per cent
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of
households
.
Vacuum
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The vacuum
A vacuum
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cleaner is second place, which is 30
percentage
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per cent
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.
Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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exist in only a few
households
.
Whereas
, in 2019, almost all
of
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households
have
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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. The usage rate of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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is gradually growing
up
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apply
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, and 70
percent
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per cent
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of
households
use
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it
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them
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in 2019. On the lower
graph
,
number
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the number
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of hours for housekeeping is decreasing, and in 2019, housekeeping time is
one fifth
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one-fifth
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of in 1920. The number is smallest between 1920 and 2019. The higher the usage rate of is electric application, the lower the number of hours of household.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, households, refrigerator with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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