Some prople say that children who are given pocket money every week will have lesser money problems when they become adults. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

Nowadays a lot of
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new parents try to raise
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children
awarencce
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money
and spending habits. to some extent, I agree with
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approach but is it a good thing to do? learning about
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from a young age can be helpful. some never learn how to handle
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how to budget or even how
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they be responsible with
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. if we learn the benefits of
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and the risks that come with
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from a young age
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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