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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is said that today in some nations
people
 have chosen increasingly to live alone more than
the
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 past. I strongly believe that it is a negative development. Living alone is a new trend that many
people
 especially those who live in developed countries tend to
this
 phenomenon.
However
,
this
 lifestyle can reduce their quality of
life
. When
people
 live alone, they may bear the weight of all costs and responsibilities.
For example
, they may face skyrocketing housing prices and living costs.
As a result
, they may rent or buy an inappropriate house or may not be able to manage their costs.
This
 leads to a reduction in their quality of
life
.
In addition
, mental health problems can result from living alone.
Due to
 difficulties which are inseparable parts of today's
life
,
people
 may bear a lot of tensions and require individuals to have a conversation and share their feelings with them. Individuals who live alone may lose
this
 opportunity to
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have an intimate conversation with individuals,
such
 as family members, who love them.
As a result
, they may experience levels of anxiety, stress, or depression. In conclusion, living alone which is chosen by many
people
 in some nations, can have positive effects on them
such
 as the feeling of independence and self-reliance. In spite of these benefits, it can have greater negative impacts like diminishing their quality of
life
 and mental health problems.
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To make a stronger task response, ensure that you discuss both views (positive and negative developments) in more detail, even if you are skewed towards one opinion.
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Provide more specific examples or data to support your claims. This will make your argument stronger and more credible.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your main points are generally well-supported, making your argument reasonably compelling.
task achievement
You have a clear and well-defined opinion, which is clearly stated and maintained throughout the essay.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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