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It is said that today in some nations people have chosen increasingly to live alone more than the past. I strongly believe that it is a negative development.

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Living alone is a new trend
which
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that
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 many
people
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specially
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who
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those who
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 live in developed countries tend to
it
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apply
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.
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,
this
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 lifestyle can reduce their quality of
life
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. When
people
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 live alone, they may bear
weight
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the weight
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all
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of all
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 costs and responsibilities.
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, they may face skyrocketing housing prices and living costs.
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, they may rent or buy an inappropriate house or may not be able to manage their costs.
This
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 leads to a reduction
of
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in
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 their quality of
life
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.
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, mental health
problem
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problems
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 can result from living alone.
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 difficulties which are inseparable parts of today's
life
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,
people
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 may bear a lot of tensions and require individuals to
can
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have a conversation and share their
feeling
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feelings
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 with them. Individuals who live alone may lose
this
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 opportunity to
can
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have an intimate conversation with individuals,
such
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 as family members, who love them.
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, they may experience levels of anxiety
and
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stress, or depression. In conclusion, living alone which
are
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is
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 chosen by many
people
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 in some nations, can have positive effects on them
such
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 as the feeling of
independency
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independence
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 and self-reliance. In spite of these benefits, it can have great negative impacts like diminishing
of
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their quality of
life
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 and mental health problems.

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task achievement
Additionally, adding a few more relevant and specific examples could further strengthen your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with subject-verb agreement and the use of appropriate grammar structures. For example, 'individuals to can have a conversation' should be 'individuals to have a conversation.' These small inaccuracies can disrupt the flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Try to vary sentence structures and use more complex sentences to showcase your command of the language. This can help in achieving a higher score in the coherence and cohesion criterion.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your opinion in the introduction and reiterated it effectively in the conclusion, ensuring that your essay remains focused throughout.
coherence cohesion
Your main points are well-supported and demonstrate a logical flow of ideas, contributing to a cohesive argument.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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