Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?
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life
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As a result
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a world that's changing so quickly, the biggest risk you can take is not taking any risk".
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On the other hand
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boring
changes
in our life
because change is always good
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a good
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the past.
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changes
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some
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people will benefit from the shift that they made. Add the comma(s)
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