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Some people say success in a person’s life as an adult is the result of the way he was brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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 to agree or disagree with the statement Some people say
success
 in a person’s life as an adult is the result of the way he was brought up by his
parents
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 to agree with
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 statement for many critical reasons the most important is that Education from a young age by
parents
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During to education
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 and learning together
most
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 important to growth
people
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according to
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 If a child is raised correctly from the beginning, he will be important in
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 society. On the other
hands
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,some people oppose
with
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 explanation for many reasons the most critical
reasons
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 is that it depends very time
abut
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parents
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become
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 society. I agree that upbringing plays a significant role in a person's
success
 as an adult.
Parents
 can influence the values,
behaviors
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, and social skills that a child acquires. If a child is raised in a supportive and encouraging environment, they are likely to develop self-confidence and the ability to face challenges.
However
, it's important to note that
success
also
 depends on other factors
such
 as opportunities, social environment, and personal efforts. So
while
 upbringing is important, it is not the only factor that determines
success
.
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