Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such palces?

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Recently, the number of tourists has kept growing

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visiting places where conditions are extreme,

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as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

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the benefits and drawbacks of visiting difficult places,

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Antarctica

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Antarctica

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one of the coldest places in the world. Only a few people live there,

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the weather being extreme.

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the benefits of living in

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antartics

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is,we are that we can avoid crowded areas and traffic jams,

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the condition is not really good for the visitor.

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, we can use thick

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very extreme weather, and

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that, to prevent

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, we can cook warm

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as soup and noodles. We can see the stunning views from

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antarctic

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at night, there are and we can see Aurora at midnight.

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antartics

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Antarctica

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is not really good for our health, particularly our

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, which is caused by the extreme weather in

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. Aside from that,

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ingredients are very difficult to find,

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the small number of

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traders there,so we just can eat

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is what it is.the bad impact of

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Antarctica

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is not only that,and still a lot of we must anticipation, especially at night,due

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coming every night in

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,and we should prepare ourselves for the storm by sheltering indoors and providing

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to survive the storm. That is

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drawbacks

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antartics

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antarctic

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if tourists want to

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. In conclusion, if the tourists want to go to

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, they should prepare equipment, ingredients

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, health, and mental for the extreme

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there.

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task achievement

Expand on your main points with more specific details and examples. For instance, instead of just mentioning the benefits and drawbacks in general terms, provide concrete experiences or scenarios that tourists might face.

language accuracy

There are several instances of grammatical errors and typos, such as "hyportemia" instead of "hypothermia" and "antartics" instead of "Antarctica." Proofread your essay carefully or use spell check to catch these mistakes.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical flow between paragraphs and sentences. Use more cohesive devices like "moreover," "in contrast," or "furthermore" to connect your ideas smoothly.

task achievement

You addressed both the benefits and drawbacks of visiting extreme places, which shows a good understanding of the prompt.

coherence cohesion

The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, which creates a complete structure for the response.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such palces?

Your opinion

More and more people want to buy famous brands in clothes cars and other items . What are the reasons behind this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some believe that it is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.) and, therefore, there is no reason to try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?