Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons why somrone should learn a foreign language Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Many
people
in
this
world are learning other
languages
besides
their mother tongue. Some citizens believe the aim
for
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studying
foreign
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a foreign
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language is only for working and travelling in a foreign country,
while
others these are not the only cause. I think there are many reasons why
people
are learning new
languages
.
This
essay will explore both points of view and summarize the conclusion. On the one hand, many benefits that
people
receive by learning
other language
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another language
other languages
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.
For example
, a citizen from Indonesia wants to understand
about
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Japanese culture, before starting to explore the culture they will learn about Japanese first to ensure
that
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the meaning of every story.
Additionally
, they can interact with
people
from Japan to gain deeper knowledge about the culture.
Thus
, justifying the cause
why
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of why
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people
study foreign
language
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languages
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really
disturbing
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people
overcome their
limit
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.
On the other hand
, some citizen limits their
acknowledge
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knowledge
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about studying
languages
for working or travelling. Most of them have opinions like that because it is the bare minimum of
people
who
wants
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want
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to visit or
apply
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job
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jobs
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in other countries.
For instance
, in Australia, if someone wants to apply for
work
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holiday visa, they should have an IELTS result before
apply
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.
This
is one of
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the evidences
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evidences
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pieces of evidence
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why there
is
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limitations on why
people
learn English, but actually, certifications like IELTS can
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to
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other occasion
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another occasion
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.
Therefore
,
people
do not judge their perspective
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the first attempt, maybe there are other
background
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backgrounds
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why
people
go into other
languages
. In conclusion, both of those perspectives are true, but I undoubtedly consider that
people
have enormous motives they acquiring other
languages
. Limitations only lock our potential for seizing opportunities out there.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting points are well-organized. For example, the first body paragraph can be more clearly divided into points about cultural understanding and interacting with people from other countries.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific and diverse examples to support your points. Currently, examples are somewhat limited and may not fully illustrate the range of reasons people learn foreign languages.
overall
Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to make your ideas clearer. This can help improve the readability of your essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views of the topic and provides a personal opinion, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and reasonably clear, providing a complete essay structure.

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