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The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The map depicts some changes in a library before and after five years. There are several changes in position and others
such
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 as added new types of
books
Use synonyms
. Not only that
,
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apply
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 but
also
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 the
amount
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number
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 of tables was changed and computers
was
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were
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 added. In general, there is a significant
changes
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change
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 in the library. Beforehand, the location of
books
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 like fiction, history, and self-help was in different directions.
Fictions
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Fiction
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 is on the north and history and self-help
on
Add a missing verb
are on
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 the west. Now, they are
on
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in
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 the same position
on
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in
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Add an article
the west
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west
Capitalize word
West
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.
In addition
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, the genre of
books
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also
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 added,
such
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 as
kitchen
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Kitchen
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,
economic
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Economics
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, and
law
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Law
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.
Furthermore
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,
on
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apply
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the north
sides
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side
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 was replaced by children's
books
Use synonyms
.
Next,
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on the below of children's
books
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, there is a new children's area. Five years ago, the total of the tables was eight and the shape was square. At present, the tables
was
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were
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reduce
Wrong verb form
reduced
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 to four and the shapes
become
Wrong verb form
became
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rectangle
Fix the agreement mistake
rectangles
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.
Moreover
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, there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 no newspapers and periodicals again because the place changed into films and DVDs. After that, computers
is
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are
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 located on the south side of films and DVDs.
Last
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,
librarian's
Correct article usage
the librarian's
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 desk, entrance, and stairs remain
on
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in
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 their position.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • modernize
  • technological facilities
  • computer stations
  • digital book borrowing
  • interactive learning
  • family-friendly spaces
  • cafe or lounge area
  • social interaction
  • open spaces
  • flexible seating arrangements
  • collaborative work
  • community events
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