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Living in a a country where you have to speak foreign Language can cause serious social. problems, as well as practical problems. To What extent do you agree or disagree.

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Residing in a foreign country where you need to communicate in its native
language
 can cause several social issues and practical
problems
.
This
 essay will explain below why I completely agree with
this
 opinion and provide information about the reasons
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 that. On the one hand, living in a foreign country that requires individuals to speak another
language
 can bring several
problems
.
Firstly
, it can be hard to communicate with foreign people, especially if individuals do not have enough speaking skills. It is no secret to have difficulty
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 if a person does not know the
language
 fully.
Therefore
 it is suggested to improve
language
 skills before migrating.
However
, raising a child in a different region with a different culture and
language
 is an extremely challenging job since it has
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 negative impact on
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 existence. Even though there are some
problems
 that people will face during their migration, I completely believe that with the help of
technology
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 all of them can be solved easily.
On the other hand
, considering foreign
language
speaker
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 as a lower stratum of society can make  non-native
speakers
 feel tired.
However
, some non-native
speakers
 with acceptable occupations enjoy significant social credibility and respect. If a foreign
language
 speaker goes shopping, native
speakers
 may laugh at that person because of an unusual accent. Probably, all of the foreigners are making attempts to juggle the demands of having a good social level and living as foreign people. In conclusion, speaking in a foreign country as a non-speaker has some social issues. All immigrants are likely to have some difficulties
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 interaction and these
problems
 lead to facing social issues,since for non-native
speakers
 social credibility can be hard to gain
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task response
Your essay addresses the impact of living in a foreign country where one must speak a different language and clearly states your agreement. However, a more nuanced argument with stronger examples and supporting details would strengthen the overall response.
coherence cohesion
To improve your score, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and develops a single idea logically. Better use of connecting phrases will enhance the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has clear introductions and conclusions, which provide a framework for your ideas.
task response
You provide relevant points, such as language difficulty and social credibility issues, and support them with explanations.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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