It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teacher be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
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a severe impact on psychological well-being in childhood.
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children’s
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to
the correct direction. In that regard, teachers will be proper when it comes to punishing kids to fix their wrong values and habits.
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punishment
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