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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
The given line chart displays the
percentage
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 of unemployment in both rural and urban areas in Australia for four quarters of 2012.
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, with a quick glance at the chart, we can see the proportion of unemployed
people
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 in rural areas was higher than in urban in all four quarters
while
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at the end
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 of the fourth
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quarter
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quarter,
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 both of them ( urban and rural) had approximately the same
percentage
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. In the first
quarter
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, urban individuals experienced the minimum
percentage
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 of non-working at the beginning of
this
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 period. The
portion
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proportion
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 of
people
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 who had no job increased in the second
quarter
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 and touched about 4%, but it decreased again during the third
quarter
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 and experienced almost 2% as well at the beginning of the first
quarter
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. In the end, the
percentage
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 of unemployed
people
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 increased dramatically and reached the highest
percentage
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 in 2012 by about 5%.
On the other hand
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, rural individuals experienced a downward trend during 2012 with the maximum decline during the second
quarter
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 when the
percentage
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 of unemployed
people
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 touched the minimum
percentage
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 of about 4%. After that, the graph shows fluctuation changes by ending almost 5% in the fourth
quarter
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, quarter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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