The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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the
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of the questionnaire for young people, to say the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019 in Africa. In general, the most
reason
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to use the
phone
it
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was for social networks, let's begin by looking at 2016,
around
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50% of teenagers
using
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their phones
in
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socialize, next in 2017,
see
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a slight dip to 28% in the same category, in 2018 see a slight up again to over half, in 2019 we notice a credible increase to 56%. The second reason
to
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using
phone
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phones
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is for email, and the ratio for all four years
it
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is similar, it was between 25% in 2016 and 19% in 2019. The remaining reasons it was for digital camera and
phone
calls, in 2017
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2017 15% of
teenager
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teenagers
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using
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phones to take photos by digital camera, and 18% of them in 2018 and 20% of them in 2019. In the end, the
phone
calls are
the
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less, around 10%
in
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the
beggining
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beginning
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period to 5% for the end of
period
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • noticeable shift
  • communication preferences
  • considerably declined
  • functionalities
  • reflecting global trends
  • emerging trend
  • educational use of technology
  • diversification
  • traditional communication
  • digital forms of communication
  • instant messaging
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