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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the development of
the
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Westley
town
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 from 1815 until the present.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
town
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 witnessed remarkable changes, becoming more residential areas and offering more facilities. One of the most notable changes
were
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was
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 that the fields
have been
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were
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 replaced by the railway and a cinema. The Twine Toll Bridge was
also
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 demolished in order to build the railway. The Coach Inn has been replaced with
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a Sport
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Sport
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 Centre and Museum.
Moreover
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, the church was removed and turned into
Westgate
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a Westgate
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 shopping centre.
Another remarkable changes
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 involved Lenton Woods, where trees were cut down and turned into Lenton Housing Estate.
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, The Lord Westley House
also
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 diminished and
replaced
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was replaced
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 by Lenton House and The Red Lion. In the southern part of the
town
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,
although
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 the
town
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 hall and market square remain unchanged at the present day, many houses were demolished to develop a modern business and residential area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • amenities
  • thoroughfare
  • connectivity
  • industrial development
  • factory
  • public amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • educational facilities
  • residential expansion
  • apartment blocks
  • commercial activity
  • shopping centers
  • restaurants
  • single-family homes
  • development
  • open field
  • noticeable change
  • replacing
  • establishment
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