In the future, all cars, buses, and truck will be driverless
In the next decades, all automobiles, buses, and trucks will develop to
driverless
, Add a missing verb
be driverless
hence
, it has only passengers in these vehicles
. I think the merits not outweighs
the demerits, and Change the verb form
outweigh
this
essay will discuss on
both sites.
On one hand, nowadays, it can be seen that some countries Change preposition
apply
start
to Wrong verb form
have started
used
technologies to control Change the form of the verb
use
vehicles
rather than used
drivers because it can reduce Wrong verb form
use
fund
Fix the agreement mistake
funds
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
offer
to Wrong verb form
offered
the
Correct article usage
apply
driver
. One significant Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
benefits
is it was Fix the agreement mistake
benefit
more
safety for passengersCorrect quantifier usage
apply
,
because sometimes Remove the comma
apply
Correct article usage
the chauffeur
chauffeur
can fall Fix the agreement mistake
chauffeurs
as
Change preposition
apply
sleep
and that can be Correct your spelling
asleep
risk
Add an article
a risk
to have
an accident. Change preposition
of having
For example
, BBC news reported that school buses driver
were drunk when carried students to their houses, Fix the agreement mistake
bus drivers
then
, buses Correct word choice
and then
were
Verb problem
apply
crash
, and that Wrong verb form
crashed
cause
all of the students Wrong verb form
caused
got
Change the verb form
to get
heart
, and someone Correct your spelling
hurt
pass
away. Fix the infinitive
to pass
In addition
, now it has some business
that Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
produced
cars that Wrong verb form
produce
used
robots for transport Wrong verb form
use
such
as Tesla that
use electricity for propel and it Correct pronoun usage
which
was
eco-friendly that not Wrong verb form
is
released
pollution Wrong verb form
release
in
the atmosphere.
Change preposition
into
On the other hand
, there have
a few drawbacks Verb problem
are
for
using Change preposition
to
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
vehicles
because the power that use
for Wrong verb form
is used
propel
would drop faster than Wrong verb form
propelling
using
automotive oil. Rephrase
when using
Moreover
, people
with low income cannot afford this
high level of vehicles
, and when people
that
let the robot drive sometimes it can take Correct pronoun usage
apply
you
to the wrong locations or system malfunctions. Correct pronoun usage
them
For instance
, my sisters who
own Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
electric Correct article usage
an
cars
, which she Fix the agreement mistake
car
used
to take her to the workplace, Wrong verb form
uses
however
, she had went
to work late because it takes Wrong verb form
goes
she
to the hospital Change the pronoun
her
that
located near her office. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Additionally
, it can happen something that we would not expect on
when we use Change preposition
apply
this
types
of Fix the agreement mistake
type
vehicles
.
In conclusion, I believe that using driverless Fix the agreement mistake
vehicle
vehicles
have
more Correct subject-verb agreement
has
beneficial
than disadvantages because it can make Replace the word
benefits
people
to improve their quality of life and convenience for people
that
have a small amount of time to spend on their transportation.Correct pronoun usage
who
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