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The line graph shows the number of participants by activities between 2000 and 2020.

The line graph shows the number of participants by activities between 2000 and 2020.
#line #participants #activities
The graph illustrates the figure of participants by activities in 20 years.
Overall
, they were provided
five
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 activities. In the latest
year
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calculation
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 the highest percentage of people participated in film club
while
 the lowest percentage participated in amateur dramatics.
Firstly
, in the
year
 2000 around 65% of people participated
on
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 film club, which is the highest percentage
on
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 that period. Next to
this
, it started to slightly
decreased
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 within 10 years.
Moreover
, it dramatically increased until 2020
with
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 approximately 69%. There were around 35% of individuals practiced
in
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martial
art
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 at the beginning of 2000.
Further
, it met amateur dramatics in the
year
 2015 and it started to increase slightly till
end
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 of the period.
Secondly
, in the years from 2000 to
2010
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2010,
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 there were below 30% of participants participated in amateur dramatics and it rapidly decreased until 2020
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 around 8%. In the
year
 2010 table tennis and musical performances remained the same with roughly 20%. People are equally interested in both activities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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