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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. what are the advantages and dis advantages of this trend?

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I
work
 as a human
resourse
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resource
resources
 manager and I do all my
work
 at home. A few months ago, I needed to buy an extra hard
driver
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 to arrange my all
work
files
. I bought
Sony
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a Sony
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 1000GB hard driver from your store O'Connell
street
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 in May. I was really happy to use
this
hd
 until
yesterday
.
Yesterday
 morning I started to use
work
files
 from
hd
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HD
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 but was reading so long and at least it stuck I tried to turn it on and off the computer but still the same and couldn't open the file. I had have lot of
work
should
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that should
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be
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 finished by
yesterday
.
Also
, all of my meeting appointment
files
 were in that
HD
 but all were cancelled because I couldn't see the times and places.
Yesterday
 afternoon I called your customer service but they explained that I have to wait three working days. I have many urgent matters in
this
HD
 so I couldn't wait to fix that for so long.
This
HD
stillhas
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still has
aguarantee
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guaranteed
. I have requested to fix
this
hd
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 and recover all my
files
 by today! I believe you are a good well-known company so I am waiting for your best and
user friendly
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 service as soon as possible.
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introduction conclusion
Ensure you include a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your request effectively.
logical structure
Improve the logical structure by organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point, such as a description of the problem, the impact on your work, and your request for resolution.
supported main points
Support your main points with concrete details to make your argument more compelling.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clear and comprehensive description of the problem with the hard drive.
relevant specific examples
Use of specific examples like the impact on your meetings adds relevance and specificity.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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