The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Driving is always a convenient way for people to go out. Since the appearance of the first car on British
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in 1888,
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used more frequently. Currently, it is not surprising to see plenty of
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, buses, etc running on the
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. In view of
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situation, it is suggested that more types of
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should be promoted and
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should be made. Personally, I agree that there is a need to do something in order to alleviate the problem of
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a large amount of
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on the
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. First and foremost, driving
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aggravates global warming,
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more environmentally friendly should be encouraged to replace the huge usage of
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. It is known that driving
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is always
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main reason for global warming. Greenhouse
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are produced during the process of driving and causing air pollution. If more and more
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keep appearing on the
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, it will apparently worsen the scenario.
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, a different way of transportation should be promoted
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of relying on driving
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.
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, rail
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can be encouraged. It can carry a lot of passengers at once
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cars
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can only carry 5 people. In the long run, it is obvious that by taking rail
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, the air pollutants produced are much less than taking
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.
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, too many
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on
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may cause traffic jams, so international
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should be launched to control
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situations. In Hong Kong, people maintain a busy life. Especially in the morning of the working days, traffic jams happen commonly and subways
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highways are always full of
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. To relieve
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conditions, governors should make international
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collaboratively whereby the ownership and usage of
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must be registered. By putting the ownership and use of
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under control, the number of
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on
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will become more stable but not increase dramatically.
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, owing to the above reasons,
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it is undeniable that
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do bring us an advantage as
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can bring us from one place to another easily, too many
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may make the shortcomings outweigh the benefits.
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, alternative forms of
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and
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for
controlling
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should be promoted.
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task achievement
Try to deepen your discussion of the proposed solutions, such as how alternative forms of transport could be realistically implemented or how international laws could be enforced and accepted globally.
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Ensure that each main point is consistently supported with examples, as some parts were less developed than others.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear position and attempts to explore the issue from different perspectives, such as environmental concerns and traffic congestion.
coherence cohesion
The essay is organized with a clear introduction, followed by body paragraphs and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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