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The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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A glance at the provided table depicts the
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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whose
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 British have in their house over
period
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a period
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 of 11 years.
Overall
,
in
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on
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 the one hand,
the
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apply
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television has the highest popularity in the
period
 shown.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the dishwasher has the lowest
rate
 of
utilizing
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utilisation
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 between 1972 and 1983. As mentioned before,
the
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apply
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television with
staggering
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a staggering
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 over 93% usage
rate
 in
this
period
be
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is
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 the most usable
tools
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tool
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.
In addition
, in
the
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apply
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term
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terms
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 of customer possession of household tool's
rate
, the
vacume
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vacuum
 cleaner is the second
also
 the peak of using
this
, is 95% in 1982. In the highlighted
period
,
dishwasher
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the dishwasher
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 and television
rate
 of utilizing
is remain
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is remained
is remaining
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 stable and
this
rate
 for
dishwaher
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dishwasher
is
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was
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 negligible
5
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at 5
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% in 1983. In striking contrast,
number
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the number
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 of
telephone
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telephones
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 in England
,
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apply
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 rose sharply and reached
the
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a
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 peak
to
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of
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 77%.
Moreover
, it is evident that video
had
Verb problem
did
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 not
existed
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exist
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 by 1983 in
the
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apply
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England.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer durables
  • Annual trends
  • Ownership percentage
  • Notable increases/decreases
  • Milestones
  • Initial/final ownership
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant changes
  • Overall trend
  • Shifts in ownership
  • Patterns in data
  • Year-on-year analysis
  • Implications
  • Data highlights
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