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Band 5.5

A museum near your house is looking for people to do part-time vountary/unpaid work. you would like to do some voulntary work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for voluntary work in letter. explain why you want to do voluntary work at museum. describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in relation to the advertisement that I saw in the newspaper asking for a volunteer to work in the museum. I am currently enrolled in the hospitality course in college. I have been given an assignment to serve
the
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society for free for the time period of six months. I have
a
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 experience
of
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 customer service because I
had
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 worked in the museum
as well as
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library
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 for 2 years,
thus
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, I have
a
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excellent experience
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 dealing with the public.
Moreover
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, I have
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very good memory since my childhood,
hence
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, I could remember the details of museum
artificts
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artefacts
 quite easily. The
contact
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of
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job
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 with the library is ending
this
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 month,
therefore
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, I would be available to work from
the
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September 1, 2024.
Besides
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, I
donot
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do not
 have classes in college for the following 4 months and I can work any time you prefer.
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 sincerely, Navneet Kaur.

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task achievement
In your second paragraph, specify more clearly how your customer service and memory skills would benefit the museum directly. For example, mention how they could help in guiding visitors or managing exhibits.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use spellcheck to catch minor spelling errors such as 'vountary' instead of 'voluntary' and 'artificts' instead of 'artifacts'.
task achievement
You maintained a formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for this type of correspondence.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure, with distinct paragraphs for different ideas, making your letter easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time volunteer
  • cultural heritage
  • community engagement
  • museum curator
  • customer liaison
  • public speaking
  • team collaboration
  • scheduling availability
  • artifact preservation
  • educational workshops
  • multilingual communication
  • curatorial assistance
  • event coordination
  • visitor services
  • exhibit maintenance
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