Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimise the bad effects?

As technology is developed, many people

use

computers

in diverse ways and especially

children

spend a

big

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amount of

time

to play

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playing

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computer

games

. In

this

essay, I will discuss what kind of negative impacts could happen and how to reduce these bad effects. ​​First of all, playing

computer

games

can cause health problems and can be an obstacle

of

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studying. The more

children

use

computers

, the more sitting

time

is increased. When kids are young, they should spend a lot of

time

in

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apply

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exercising and

outdoor

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.

This

is because activities can create positive energy and

it

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apply

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leads

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lead

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to mental and physical health.

However

, playing

computer

games

keeps

children

from being active.

In addition

, the obsession

of

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with

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computers

makes it hard for

children

to concentrate on studying. To focus on study,

children

are required to have long-lasting concentration and patience.

Computer

games

give immediate satisfaction and if

children

keep getting used to it, they will never learn how to be patient. Eventually, it will

cause

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a negative impact on their tasks.

Therefore

, playing

computer

games

should be controlled by adults.

To fix

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these problems,

it

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requires many people’s help

such

as parents, teachers, the

government

,

and

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etc. The

government

should make a law to make

children

use

less

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fewer

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computers

. In Korea, there is a shutdown law that

the

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apply

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computer

users, who are under 18, cannot access

computer

games

after 10

p.m

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p.m.

and it works to reduce the amount of

time

spent on

computers

. Not only the

government

moves but

also

parents’ and teachers’ efforts are required. They should keep educating

children

that

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on

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how to

use

computers

in the right way and why they have to learn self-control. In the end, many problems of

computer

games

could be fixed. In conclusion,

computer

games

can cause a variety of issues,

for

instance

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health issues and blocking

study

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studies

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. If people teach

children

how to

use

computers

in the right direction and the

government

create

the

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law

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laws

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which can prevent

overuse

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the overuse

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of

computers

, these issues could be reduced.