Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

poverty
is becoming a major problem in our
comunities
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communities
.Few
people
beleive
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believe
that most of the crime in our society is done by
poverty
.I agree with
this
notion
beacuse
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because
,
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of,lack
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lack
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the lack
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of
physiologicals neeeds
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physiological needs
and
role
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the role
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of social
meida
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media
.
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with the statement that
poverty
is the main cause of crimes.
this
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is because,many
people
living
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in a poor condition
due to
which, they are unable to achieve their physiological needs.In many countries individuals earn
on
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daily wages,it becomes difficult for them to
fullfill
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fulfil
their basic needs.
For example
, a survey conducted on
poverty
has shown that
,
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80% of
people
in
pakistan
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earn
on
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daily wages.
most
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of them drive rikshaws.
On the other hand
, another reason may be, the role of media. when
people
are not able to attain their needs,they often try to gain it forcefully.They indulge themselves in criminal activities like snatching
properties ,to
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kill
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someone for food
while
social media is the other factor that
show
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increasing
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rate of crime
beacuse
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because
of
poverty
.for intance
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,criminal activities
shown
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in the drama industry.
people
learn how to offence from dramas.
therefore
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,
provety
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poverty
may be one of
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the reason
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reason
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reasons
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of
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crime
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the crime
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.
To conclude
,
i
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stronlgy
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strongly
agree with the
statment
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statement
that
poverty
is the basic cause of offences
beacuse
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because
of
lack
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a lack
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of physiological needs and the role , social media
play
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plays
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to enhance
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in enhancing
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the
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apply
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poverty
.
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Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors; particularly, common mistakes like 'comunities' (communities), 'beleive' (believe), and 'physiologicals' (physiological) need to be corrected.
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You address both main reasons that support your view, which forms a balanced argument.

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