the diagram below shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks
The diagram illustrates the
process
of how factories make bottles and cans of carbonated beverages.
In general, that is
a largely mechanical process
including 5 stages, from rainwater intake to transport products to supermarkets.
Having looked at the given picture for more details, the first step, rainwater is filtered with chemicals inside the water
softener to make water
clean. Then
, the pump delivers the water
to electric beaters to undergo heating evaporation. Next step, it is transported to an area where the water
will undergo a carbonated process
through the cooling pipe.
The process
continues with delivering the carbonated water
into the mixing tank where it will be mixed with different chemicals including colouring, flavours, and syrup. After that, the filter will fill the bottles and cans with the carbonated drinks. Finally
, these bottles and cans will be packed in containers and trucks will be delivered items to the supermarkets.Submitted by ieltswritingpracticedl on
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