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Many people in the world are learning English for personal development. How does learning English in an English-speaking country differ from learning it in a non-English-speaking country? Why?

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English
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language
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 plays a vital role in future aspects of the career, for that reason many individuals try to learn
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 for their own benefit and
overall
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 personal development.
This
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 essay will outline how the learning will differ if a person is trying to learn
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 when they are a citizen of a non-
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-speaking
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 or
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English
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To begin
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 with, learning a new
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 might be an easy task for those who are already living in an
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-speaking
country
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, as it enables them to communicate with others in
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 throughout the day with a tremendous improvement and learning on
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a daily
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 basis.
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 advantage a person can avail in an
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-speaking
country
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 is
that
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the wide range of
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availability
 of a tutor who is well versed in their native
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 i.e.,
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.
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, a prestigious academic institute
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 the USA published an article
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about
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 non-speaking
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 immigrants stating that they
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were able to learn
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 by hearing and communicating in
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 with natives in a couple of months with no extra
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On the other hand
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, the same task can be very complicated and
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individuals who live in a non-
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country
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. The foremost reason behind
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 is that they might not be able to communicate with others in
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 other than their native
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,
as well as
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 they might not
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 to take
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 from a genuine tutor who
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 very well. Other factors,
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 as the complex learning pattern and less availability of resources
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hamper the learning process. A prime example of
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 scenario can be considered a survey conducted among the
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Asian
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 nations, where it was concluded that
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the majority
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 of the individuals faced many difficulties because their tutors were not able to guide them properly or there were
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 resources available throughout the
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, which indirectly affected the progress of the people who wished or were trying to learn
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. In conclusion, a variety of factors can improve or worsen the ability of
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people
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 who try to learn
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, the primary factors include the
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 they live in, if they reside in
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English-speaking
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an English-speaking
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country
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then
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 they might face
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 hurdles in their learning,
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, a person from non-
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-speaking
country
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 might experience numerous difficulties
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 as the non-availability of a good tutor and resources.

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task achievement
In the next essay, ensure to address the prompt more comprehensively by discussing both the differences and providing reasons. Currently, the essay touches on the differences but lacks in-depth discussion of 'why' these differences exist.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use clear topic sentences and transition statements to ensure each paragraph flows smoothly to the next. This strengthens the logical structure of your essay.
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Try to integrate more specific and detailed examples which relate directly to the points being made. This will help in providing clear and comprehensive ideas supporting your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-presented, setting up and summarizing the essay effectively.
task achievement
The essay identifies key differences in learning English in different settings, which is relevant to the task.

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