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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph presents changes in the exportation rate in Australia to four countries (Japan,
US
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the US
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, China,
India
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and India
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) over
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period
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a period
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 of 22 years.
over
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apply
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all, for most of the
period
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 the US had the
bigest
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biggest
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 share of
the
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apply
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Australian
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exports
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 except for the
last
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 two years,
were
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where
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 Japan exceeded the US.
Accourding
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According
 to the data, the proportion of
Australian
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exports
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 to Japan had significantly
increase
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, it
stared
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started
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 at around 2% in 1990
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then
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and then
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 reached 30% in 2012. In
contarst
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contrast
,
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the
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exportation rate to the US dropped
gardually
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gradually
 from 27% to
approximatly
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approximately
 17% over the same
period
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.
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, the
china
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China
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 share of
Australian
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exports
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 saw a slight fluctuation between 12% and 7%
among
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over
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 the 22 years.
similarly
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, in India where the
percentge
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percentage
 of
Australian
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exports
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 experienced a
period
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 of noticeable raising by 7% from 1% in 1990 to 8% in 2010, Afterword , it
decresed
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decreased
 slightly in 2012 by 2%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, australian, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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