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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information.
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The maps below illustrate an industrial
area
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 in the Norbiton in present, and how will
looked
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look
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 like in the future. There is a small legend that
to show
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shows
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 information about directions, housing and factory
area
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.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that there are several social facilities
will
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apply
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planned
in
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for
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 the future. To closer look, nowadays, there are eight factories
surround
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surrounding
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in
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apply
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a roundabout. River
separate
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separates
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 farmland and the town. In the future, under the river will
became
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 host one housing with a long road.
In addition
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, planners will add
small
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a small
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 roundabout too. Below
in
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is
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 the river and east
side
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 of the map, there will be replaced a
playforund
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playground
area
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 and three
accomadation
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accommodation
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area
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areas
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. Noth-east
side
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 of the big roundabout, there will added three
accommadation
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accommodation
 too. At the
and
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end
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 of the roundabout,
will
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a will
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built
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be built
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 school.
Small
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The small
A small
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 roundabout will
separated
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separate
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 two social facilities, which
is
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are
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 shops and
medical
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a medical
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 centre.
East
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The east
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side
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 of the small roundabout has
became
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become
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house
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a house
the house
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 for
medical
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the medical
a medical
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 centre and
west
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the west
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side
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 of
the
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apply
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this
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 figure has
became
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become
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house
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a house
the house
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 for shops.
To sum up
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,
industrial
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the industrial
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area
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 will changed into
suburban
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the suburban
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area
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 for Norbitan
citizien
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citizen
citizens
, They will
planned
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plan
be planned
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 to
removed
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remove
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 factories and
will built
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build
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 new social infrastructure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • current layout
  • proposed plans
  • industrial area
  • factories
  • main roads
  • geographical landmarks
  • rivers
  • conversion
  • residential houses
  • residential facilities
  • schools
  • parks
  • infrastructure improvements
  • connectivity
  • new roads
  • bridges
  • pathways
  • commercial facilities
  • community facilities
  • shops
  • healthcare centers
  • amenities
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