The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the total number of students who
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certain majors in the university in 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were several subjects who
intract
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attracted
more females.
Whereas
, others seemed more likely interesting for males. On the
first
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other
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hand, the subjects including social sciences, languages and arts dominated by women. Social sciences,
for instance
,
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had slightly over 20
thousands
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thousand
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girl students. The same trends happened in languages and arts where the number of
female
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females
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was around 15
thousands
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thousand
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and just below 10
tousands
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thousands
thousand
respectively.
On the other hand
, men chose to dedicate themselves
in
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to
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the
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apply
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several majors
particularly
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, particularly
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sciences,
mathematices
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mathematics
, literature and law. Almost twofold of
students
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the students
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in science classes
was
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were
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males.
In addition
,
mathematices
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mathematics
had a contrast
different
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of proportion, roughly 20
thousands
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thousand
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were men and only just over 10
thousands
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thousand
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fulfilled
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were fulfilled
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by women.
Moreover
, in humanities, the proportion of gender was
balance
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balanced
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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