Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

While
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researches
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on
animals
is cruel and should be outlawed, others argue that without them there would not be any scientific discovery in
this
world. Both
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of view towards justification of experimentation on
animals
and suggestions on alternative means will be
further
discussed in
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essay.
To begin
with, it may seem sensible for some to believe that testing on wild creatures can be notoriously bad for them.
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because when it comes to experimenting they
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captivity and either get injected or
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chemical
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without any consent.
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that these
animals
will be killed after the projects
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. As a
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why numerous people are calling out for their right to live peacefully in their natural habitat without getting slaughtered for the sake of mankind. Many opponents of
this
idea might
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that without their sacrifices a
renown
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discovery might not happened.
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the relationship between behavioural and external
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particular
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. By keeping a rat in a cage with
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; one for mild electric shock
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feeder
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. Through experimenting, when the rats learn which button
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for
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them they slowly
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that As far as I
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, I reckon that there is an alternative means of experiment that can be
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between In a nutshell,
although
it is undeniable that experimentation on
animals
can be somewhat
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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