Although parents are responsible for raising a child, making decisions plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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life
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impact on
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their
personality
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on
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teacher
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confidence
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personally
tend to agree, that
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should make
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their
own decisions in
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if a
child
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polyed in school, he
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to face them polys and express himself in his own words.
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, it will give him a strong
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independent
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saving money and spending
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habits
, that will have
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in his wise
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future
income being spent and placed on crucial
life
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expenses
. Some will say
parent
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should have
more
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invasive
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in
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their
child
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of that could lead to
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thing called "
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which
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is the parent
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always
keep
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their
eye's on the
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child
in every moment
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his
life
, even on the simplest things, like
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his lunch box after coming back from
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day at school. In conclusion,
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a parent
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parent
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parents
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can be sometimes too
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and it's
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understandable
for
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their
own son. But in some
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it's healthy to let him be expressing and
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living
responspaly
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responsibly
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Your essay should have a clearer structure with paragraphs that each discuss a single main idea. Introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion should be distinct and coherent.
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Proofread your work for spelling and grammatical errors. This will make your essay more readable and help you clearly communicate your ideas.
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Develop your ideas further by explaining them in more detail. For instance, provide specific examples and elaboration on how making decisions influences a child's development.
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You have addressed the topic by discussing the role of decision-making in a child's life, and you provided both positive and negative viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your opinion on the topic fairly well, although it could be clearer and more concise.

Fully explain your ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary caregivers
  • significant impact
  • lay the groundwork
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • gradual transition
  • independence
  • external factors
  • pivotal role
  • balanced view
  • operate in isolation
  • cultural and familial norms
  • extended family
  • community
  • nuanced agreement
  • unintended consequences
  • positive and negative
  • complexity
  • diversity of family structures
  • multitude of factors
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