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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2F5ca8da23c1e81552ecb2459be88a46af.png&w=640&q=75

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2F5ca8da23c1e81552ecb2459be88a46af.png&w=640&q=75
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The given linear process diagram illustrates about life stages of
enormous
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an enormous
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water living
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water-living
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fish
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 called the Salmon from
beging
Correct your spelling
being
 salmon eggs to
growing
Correct article usage
the growing
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 period.
Initially
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, Female
fish
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, which is laid eggs below the reeds.
eggs
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Eggs
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 have been at 6 to 6 months under the tiny stones.
Following
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this
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, six months later, they are grown as
a
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apply
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small
fish
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.
while
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 they are being lived in the
fast flowing
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fast-flowing
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 river. that was called "Smolt".
moreover
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,
size
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the size
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 measured at 12 to 15cm. Once
this
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 completed, Adult Salmon was lived Open Sea for Five years. At
this
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 time It has been at 70 to 76cm.
consequently
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fish
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 becomes a
marvalous
Correct your spelling
marvellous
 throughout the living period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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