The charts below show what Uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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The bar graphs compare how many UK

students

worked at a part-time job,

volunteed

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volunteer

volunteered

or continued their studies or even could not find a job after they graduated and postgraduated in 2008. In general, the total amount of people who

further

studied after

their

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college was the highest point.

In addition

, after graduation and postgraduation,

students

who worked voluntarily accounted for the lowest number. It is clearly seen that the number of

further

study

students

was nearly ten times as many as voluntary work

students

, at approximately 30000 and 3500 people for graduated high schools, and at around 2700 and 345

students

for graduated colleges respectively.

Moreover

, the proportion of unemployment compared with other categories of

students

, excluding full-time work, was nearly the same for both destination UK

students

after leaving college.

By contrast

, after high school, part-time

students

were

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roughly similar unemployment,

stood

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standing

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at around 17735 and 16000 individuals respectively.

While

with postgraduated

students

, they were above 2500

students

, nearly twice as high as unemployed

students

, at around 1600 people in the same year.

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The charts below show what Uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

People should follow the customs and traditions when they start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM food. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this

In the countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people by imported food?What could be done to encourage people to buy local food.