The charts below show what Uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what Uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The bar graphs compare how many UK
students
worked at a part-time job,
volunteed
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volunteer
volunteered
or continued their studies or even could not find a job after they graduated and postgraduated in 2008. In general, the total amount of people who
further
studied after
their
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college was the highest point.
In addition
, after graduation and postgraduation,
students
who worked voluntarily accounted for the lowest number. It is clearly seen that the number of
further
study
students
was nearly ten times as many as voluntary work
students
, at approximately 30000 and 3500 people for graduated high schools, and at around 2700 and 345
students
for graduated colleges respectively.
Moreover
, the proportion of unemployment compared with other categories of
students
, excluding full-time work, was nearly the same for both destination UK
students
after leaving college.
By contrast
, after high school, part-time
students
were
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roughly similar unemployment,
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at around 17735 and 16000 individuals respectively.
While
with postgraduated
students
, they were above 2500
students
, nearly twice as high as unemployed
students
, at around 1600 people in the same year.
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  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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