Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

Nowadays
advertisements
play a significant role in the
life
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lives
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of
people
,
while
some view
advertisements
to have positive effects as they can get
further
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of
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the
products
available in
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,others,
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think of it as a negative part considering them to be useless and distracting. In my
opinion
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advertisements
should be seen optimistically.
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,
people
who view
display
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of
advertisements
as a positive approach think so because of the fact it provides them
more
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information about the availability of various
products
in
market
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.
Moreover
, consumers can
also
get the idea about using the
products
in
more
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effective way and they can know that
this
product
is not going to be a scam.
For example
,
people
are getting their hands on viral
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product
wireless
fan
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fans
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and
due to
public advertisement
people
are trusting that
product
more and more.
On the other hand
, some individuals believe that some
advertisements
are useless and are distractions.
This
is because sometimes
people
do not actually need
any thing
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anything
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but by continuously watching
it's
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ad on
tv
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or on billboards , they get tempted towards that specific
product
and they end up buying it.
This
results in
loss
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of money that could have been used for other useful things.
For instance
, after viewing
advertisement
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advertisements
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of appealing gadgets on
tv
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people
wasted
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their money and time by investing in the things they actually
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not need. In conclusion,
although
, some
people
consider
digital
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display of ads on TV or boards to be distracting and useless, I believe that it has more merits as compared to its demerits as it saves us from scams and
also
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us insights
to
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the way to use those
products
.
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task achievement
You have addressed the main points of the topic by discussing both views and providing your own opinion, which is good. However, your ideas could be developed more fully with additional examples and more detailed explanations. Try to elaborate more on each point to make your argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
The essay is generally coherent, and the ideas are logically structured. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Consider using more linking words and phrases to improve the flow of the essay.
general
There are some minor grammatical and lexical inaccuracies, but they do not impede understanding. Try to proofread your essay to catch these small errors, as they can slightly affect the clarity of your ideas.
introduction
Your introduction clearly states the topic and presents a balanced view, which sets a good tone for the rest of the essay.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples to support your main points, which makes your arguments more convincing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • manipulative tactics
  • brand loyalty
  • target audience
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • social issues
  • materialism
  • persuasive techniques
  • unrealistic expectations
  • mental health
  • consumer spending
  • brand image
  • societal values
  • awareness campaigns
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