The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph above depicts information about the average per
month
temperatures
in
celcius
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Celsius
in three various cities.
Along
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the
year
, Paris and Dubai tend to increase in temperature in
the
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apply
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half
year
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a year
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.
On the other hand
, Sydney had
different
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a different
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trend which the
city
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city's
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decrease in temperature in
the
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apply
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half
year
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a year
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. In January, Paris
compares
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compared
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to other cities,
become
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became
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the most cold
city
in the first
month
which was 5
degrees
celcius
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celsius
. The
degrees
up
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are up
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constantly until
reach
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reaching
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the peak in July and August at 20
degrees
celcius
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celsius
. After that, the
temperatures
downward continuously until
end
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the end
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of the
year
. In another
city
, Dubai
begin
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begins
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with
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at
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19
degrees
celcius
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celsius
in January. Similar
like
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to
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Paris, the
city
showed
upward
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an upward
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constantly's
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constant's
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trend until hit
the
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its
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peak at 36
degrees
celcius
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celsius
in August.
Then
,
slump
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slumped
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significantly until
end
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the end
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of the
year
to 21
degrees
celcius
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celsius
.
Last
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city
, Sydney had 24
degrees
celcius
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celsius
in January.
Afterward
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, the
temperatures
decrease from
month
to
month
until hit the bottom at 13
degrees
celcius
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celsius
in August. Later on, the
temperatures
increased again.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words month, temperatures, celcius, year, city, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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