The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
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The line graph depicts moderate US clients' spending on mobile
phone
and residential
phone
services
over a period of 9 years, from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
,
while
the
number
of cell
phone
services
was gradually rising
year
by
year
, there was a downward trend for the level of house
phone
servicing. In 2001, the average amount of expenditure on mobile
phone
services
was a little more than $200 in a
year
.
Then
, its
number
slightly increased, having reached $300 in 2002, after which there was a constant rise during the next 5 years. Equaling nearly $600 in 2007, the
number
continued growing until it almost doubled by the end of the period. Starting at its peak of approximately $700, the annual
number
of
services
for residential phones began to decline slowly, reaching about $500 in a
year
in 2007.
Finally
, keeping decreasing
further
, it got less than $400 in 2010, having dropped by almost $300 over 9 years.
Moreover
, in 2006, numbers for both
phone
services
showed the same result of nearly $550 in the middle of the decade.
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