To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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alternative
food
resource
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resources
insects
product in order to strike balance
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a balance
betwenn
supply and demand Correct your spelling
between
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a group
the group
notion
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has
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effects
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the environment
insects
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the latest experts' Add the preposition
according to
reserch
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research
insects
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nutrition like high protein and less saturated fat Change preposition
in
hence
consuming insects
beacome
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become
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popular
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a popular
food
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especially
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these kind
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this kind
these kinds
snack
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snacks
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are
throughly
agreeable in the West. Correct your spelling
thoroughly
secondly
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product of Add an article
a mass
the mass
insects
leads to increase
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an increase
the
net price Change preposition
in the
therefore
all classes of Correct your spelling
society
sociaty
are able to eat them and provide their basic body needs because Correct your spelling
society
the
expense of meat products
surge Change preposition
of the
hence
eating insects
would be prevailing
alternative with affordable Correct article usage
the prevailing
price
for meeting needs.
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prices
on the other hand
, insect products have some downdides
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downsides
firstly
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source
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sources
insects
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produced
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produce
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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producing insects
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on
large-scale
effect on decreasing Correct article usage
a large-scale
vegtables
and changing weather Correct your spelling
vegetables
condition
by producing gases.
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conditions
secondaly
, producing Correct your spelling
secondary
secondly
insect
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insects
bring
about some damage to Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
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the infrastructre
infrastructre
specially Correct your spelling
infrastructure
wooden
and steel.
as outlined above, producing and eating Replace the word
wood
insect
have different advantages and disadvantages Fix the agreement mistake
insects
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benefits
outweigh the side effects if the government created reliable terms to conserve nature and urban constructure, Correct article usage
the benefits
insects
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an appropriate
food
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future.Correct article usage
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task achievement
Ensure that every point you make is supported with relevant examples or evidence. For instance, you mentioned the nutritional benefits of insects but didn't provide any detailed examples or studies to back this claim.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph seamlessly transitions from one idea to the next. Using transition words and phrases can help in achieving this.
coherence cohesion
Although your main points are clear, they should be better supported. For example, the impact on infrastructure from insect farming needs more detailed explanation and supporting points.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion and introduction are present, giving the essay a complete structure. This helps in delivering a clear message to the reader.
task achievement
You addressed both the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects, covering the main points required in the task.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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