In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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pupils tend to live with
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family and city when
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they
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study
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and another group of
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would prefer to
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in another city and have
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life
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and home. I subscribe to the notion that it depends on
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which
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they make a decision to
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in another city
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prefer living with my family during
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years because
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would like to be obsessed with my
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netbooks
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rather than earn money or do
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chores. there is a
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alone, first of all , university
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are aware
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living is too hard and bears a
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of
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which no ones want to
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them to lead their lives which
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leads to
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students
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resistant and resilient in various coincidence of
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. another effect is, when pupils become alone, they make
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attempt
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to become familiar
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with
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and make
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connection
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network
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the network
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which it will bring to open up
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opportunity
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opportunities
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after university courses.
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,
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style of living has a negative effect especially on university
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courses
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because
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students
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have
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to struggle with different subjects including
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studying
setbooks
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set books
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plus earning
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an affordable
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income and doing
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household
chores simultaneously bring quite challenges like not passing the examination,
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when my brother had immigrated another country and studied abroad, he could not
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and meet his needs abrest ,
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he
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decided to return. as outlined above, studying abroad has lots of
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positive
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such
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as increasing
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self-concern
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it is able to raise strain because of various challenges of
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but
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i
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believe that it will be
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a valuable
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experience
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walks of
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if they have
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the potency
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of living alone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • finance management
  • exposure
  • broaden horizons
  • open-minded
  • adaptability
  • conducive environment
  • isolation
  • homesickness
  • financial burden
  • household duties
  • academic responsibilities
  • personal growth
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